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For the past thirty-four weeks—holy cow—I’ve been sharing six sentence chunks of my first drawer novel. Thank you all for your patience!
Today, I thought I’d shake things up by offering six from my current WIP, The Pigeon Drop, and introduce one Judith Thompson, as observed through the puzzled eyes of her former partner, David McRae.
It wouldn’t have surprised him if she’d been running a dojo, working personal security, or bouncing at a high-class bar. Or some kind of law enforcement, as long as it was three-initialed or invisible—even if her record hadn’t been expunged, any agency running covert ops would take one look at her skill set and shred her files.
But there she was, finding books, answering questions, fixing the photocopier. Eating a brown bag lunch, for God’s sake. Wearing a beige cardigan . . . not that she’d ever had much use for fashion, but the color was pushing it. And she was smiling at people he’d be hard pressed not to slap upside the head.
After a morning’s observation, he’d been more than half-convinced that the Jayce Thompson he knew had completely disappeared into this quiet, normal life that didn’t seem to be a cover or a con.
Very intriguing! I want to know more about what it was like when they were partners, and what has happened to both of them since. Great six!
Thanks, Jessica! I’m so glad to hear you say that!
That is a bewildering introduction
It’s actually from the second chapter—the first chapter is from Judith’s POV, but she’s too busy to get into her own background.
You’re telling it true about librarians, yo.
Except for the beige and the bag lunches . . .
Great setup for the story, and totally fascinating look inside the character from someone else’s perspective. Love. Can’t wait to read more.
Thanks. It’s from the second chapter, but Judith isn’t the introspective type.
Hmm, that is intriguing. I love your details here–his speculation about what she “should” be doing, for example. Great six!
Thank you! Of course, how others see us isn’t always how we see ourselves — and vice versa.
I loved his slap upside the head comment! This snippet made me interested in both characters, very hard to accomplish in 6 sentences!
Great to see Judith show up on Six Sunday. Getting a look at her through McRae’s eyes says so much. Great pick of sentences.
Thanks, Lisa. Your six introduced one of my favorite countdown characters!
You’re welcome. And thank you—glad you enjoyed it. He’s one of my favorites, too.
She must be hiding something if she wears a beige cardigan. And, that pigeon! It needs to hop on a treadmill. LOL.
Actually, she is . . . but she probably didn’t think much about how it looked, anyway.
And hey, I wouldn’t dis that particular pigeon—there’s some muscle in there somewhere.
I liked the other pigeon watching from around the corner.
Intriguing six which makes me wonder whether she is still under cover.
No telling, Paula—at least not yet.
Excellent set up. I like this a lot. One of my favorite six sunday posts.
Thank you, Cara!
Is it her or is it her evil twin?
LIbrarians, evil? I like it! Maybe in the next book, Kate!
I love the description of this character!
Thanks, Carrie-Anne! i like the description of yours.
very intriguing character!
Thank you!
She must be a very good actor! Wonder what happens when he talks to her? Great six.
Well, she has a great grip on her temper, anyway.
Thanks, Dianne.
“Eating a brown bag lunch…” Love, love that line.
That should tell you a lot about David, too, I hope.
Very good! I want to know more about these characters.
Good!
Thanks, Susan!
I have been languishing in the first chapter for about a year. Now I have the first chapter plus six. Hey, I only have a limited number of years left to yearn for closure.
Nag, nag, nag!