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Once again, this bit is directly after last week’s. No one is eating, but they are gloating a little bit over finally trapping the man who has been dogging their steps since the murder*—and who might have committed it . . .

”Some people,” the Pressman said with something approaching relish, “prefer not to carry identification on their person.”
“And I’ll bet he refused point blank to give his name,” I added.
Charlie nodded. “Yeah—pitched a real snit from what I heard. You know him?” he asked. “’Cause if you do, you know I’ll have to call it in.”
The Pressman and I shook our heads as one. “We’ve never seen him before,” I said, widening my eyes as far as they would go.
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*Did I mention there was a murder? It’s in here somewhere:
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Excellent dialogue and great descriptions–I could hear tones and see expressions. Nice snippet.
Thanks, Teresa.
Clyota and Reynard are a great pair! I love them
You know, Wendy, their partnership is stronger than the romance in this . . . but that’s probably okay, right?
If it works, of course! And it does
Fantastic air of mystery and suspense here. I really like the dialogue and their responses to the question “You know him?” Excellent!
Thanks, Ryan. Glad you think it works!
Oh yes, the extra wide eyes are very convincing proof of innocence LOL – loved that detail! Terrific snippet!
What’s a completely transparent lie between friends? XD Thanks, Veronica!
Great dialogue and descriptions!
Thanks!
These two are great characters. I couldn’t practically see those widened eyes and tones of innocence.
I know we’re not supposed to play favorites, Elaine, but I think I love the Pressman best . . .
Felt the mystery and loved this characters. Great Snippet..
Thanks, Brenda!
Terrific. And I love the title.
Thanks. It took me a couple tries to get a title that didn’t stink on ice—I’m still not sure, but it’s better than the first one!
sharp and very natural interactions between the characters, the seriousness coming across very clearly. nice snippet!
Thank you! I’m not sure I can take credit for that, JoAnne—these two are snarkmasters . . .
Very smooth, natural dialogue. Love it!
Thanks, Karysa—I’ve been working on my dialogue.
Nice snippet
Good dialogue.
Thanks, Sandra!
The fact that she widened her eyes rather than that her eyes widened makes me smell a fish.
Yep. That and the innocence thing are a big clue.
I like the rytham your dialogue has in this snippet. Well done! The only thing that gave me pause, and I could be really wrong about this, is as I read it, I desperately wanted to put a comma before and after point blank.
Commas are my nemeses, Jess—I’ll figure them out eventually!
Methinks she doth protest too much. Nicely done, Sarah.
Methinks likewise—thanks, Siobhan!
Great six, love the dialogue, and I agree the widening of her eyes was feigned innocence!
Thanks, Paula—over the top eye-widening is a specialty of mine.
Oh, so NOT innocent! I love how you show-not-tell this – amazing job!
Thanks, Sarah—I’ve been working on that, too . . .
Of course they don’t know him? How could he even think that? LOL Clyota may have over-done the wide eyes a bit.
I completely agree, Kate—maybe she was compensating for the Pressman, who can only widen one?
Great dialogue and descriptions!
Thanks, Carrie-Anne!
Your post was amazingly tense today—I have no idea which way it will go!
Great dialogue! Very fast paced!
Thanks, Amy—these characters tend to speak in zingers.
Lots of tension and unspoken dialogue here. Great snippet!
Thanks, Joyce!
I love the eyes widening and shaking heads – they are so NOT innocent! Awesome 8.
Nope. Can’t say that they are!
Thanks, AJ!
Love the dialogue, very nice rhythm!!
Thanks!
Gah. Too short. They’re all too short. Just when you draw me in it’s over.
When, pray tell, am I gonna get a chance to read an entire chapter?
I’ve been waiting for someone to create”Full Chapter Fridays,” but so far, no dice.
I’m taking the compliment and running with it, though . . . Thanks, Mike!