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This week, Clyota is using Charlie’s secure Net connection to access a data pocket left behind by her mother. She’s hoping it contains some answers about her mother’s alleged crime . . . maybe.
With my luck, I was about to lob a metavirus bomb into the Net.
My hands stilled as that notion took hold of my high-level of anxiety and cranked it up another four notches.
I’d told Rafe that I trusted Mom, and I did—but the Moonshot Killer was another matter. According to her press, that Monica Hermandine-Mykota wouldn’t balk at sacrificing her daughter to crash the world back to the Bad Old Times.
I took a breath. It was too late to back out now, to pack everything back in the lockbox and go back to my safe little world and my petty little Mommy Issues—besides, if the worse happened, Charlie could be counted on to give me a merciful bullet, and Reynard would have a hell of a story, about which I would no longer care.
And I needed to know.
I hit the Enter key.
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I love everything about this story. Librarians, metaviruses, hitting the enter key…lol! Love it.
I did, but still . . .
Thanks, Anastasia! 🙂
Ooooh this is intriguing! Very different, definitely up my alley. 🙂
I’m glad to hear that, Natalie! 🙂
There are so many good things going on in this snippet, I don’t know where to start.
I like this concept: “the Bad Old Times.” And that entire last para is chock full of information yet so fluid.
Nice job, Sarah!
Wow–thanks, Teresa!
I’ve been working on my tendency towards infodump. Maybe it’s finally paying off!
Veeeeery nice snippet. High level of tension and it screams off the page. Great job. You may want to check that last paragraph for the word “back”. Three in that opening sentence. Sorry! Editor in me! I can’t help myself!!
Editors are always welcome here, Amy. 🙂
And oops. I think I added two of those backs last night when I was throwing thing together . . . It’s killing me to leave it that way, but it’s fixed in the actual MS now.
Thanks!
She has to know Charlie wouldn’t actually give her the merciful bullet, but Reynard would certainly have a compelling story. I wonder if he’d write it. I’d think he would. Clyota’s anxiety comes through loud and clear here. Makes for a tense, but enjoyable read. Riveting is the word I’m looking for. 🙂
Charlie wouldn’t think it’s warranted, I’m sure. 🙂
Reynard would definitely write the story!
Thanks, Lisa!
Makes my fingers jittery just to type a response here! To click or not to click ENTER. The moment of truth comes. Well done.
Thanks, Sharon 🙂
She’s got a lot of guts! I’d probably do the same in her position, just to find out everything.
Writers and librarians are notoriously curious people, Carrie-Anne. 😉
Oh the tension in this snippet! I want to know what happens next. The truth or not?
It’ll be the truth . . . but not quite what Clyota’s expecting!
Fascinating. Great tension. I want to find out more.
Thanks, Kate—I’m glad it hooked you.
Don’t know why, but this got me thinking about librarians and cats. I think Clyota’s got a little cat in her. Certainly the curiosity.
Maybe cats have librarians in them, too—mine is always trying to sit on what I’m reading . . . 😉
I LOVE this story. And of course she has to know! Can’t wait for more, another excellent excerpt.
Thanks, Veronica! I’m glad you like it. 🙂
Love this! It would be impossible to resist “Full Metal Librarian” anyway, but the voice is fabulous! I’ll be back for more! In fact, I’m going to follow & poke around to see what else I can fall for around here. 😀
~Charley
It’s a much better title than it was originally, Charley—it usually take me a couple tries.
Feel free to browse around—hope you like what I’ve done with the place. 😀
Welcome back this week! Full Metal Librarian–I love that. Lots of great tension and buildup here.
Thanks! A full metal bullet (or so I’m told) has a hard shell around a soft core—seemed to fit Clyota pretty well . . .
Great tension as she reaches the point of no return. Excellent!
Thanks, Paula! Not too dramatic?
Lots of intriguing stuff going on in that library. I like her hesitance and her anxiety. Well done!
I hope so, Ryan—thanks!
Goodness! Now I need to know, too! Love the concept behind this story, Sarah! Well done!
Thanks, Zee. I’m glad you like it!
I would normally use this forum to complain about how ridiculously short these excerpts are. But I owe you a chapter from you own WIP, don’t I?
So, ahem, I’ll be going now.
Yes you do, and get back here—you promised me zombies, dang it.
I’ve been bogged down, but this week, I think.
Excellent!
We all have such a deep need to know a parent better…what is true, what is an unreal story. The methods of probing are very interesting.