Weekend Writing Warriors: Pigeons (The Parnassus)

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In three days, I’m headed for the Midwest Writing Conference!

I’ll be rooming with the fabulous Sherry Stanfa-Stanley (if I can remember the name of the hotel) and workshopping, learning, and pitching.

Should be a good time.

While I obsess about what to pack (legal pads, check . . . deodorant, double-check), have a look at a few more sentences from Pigeons—which, for any agent or editor tuning in, is not a caper novel (right, Linda?).  It’s a heartwarming mystery about a group of semi-reformed thieves using their dubious talents to get their boss a bone marrow donor.

In Vegas, baby.

Las Vegas Strip (Panorama)

McRae was fully aware that there were only a handful of people who could tell him he was wrong and make him listen: the judge who had finally convicted him of fraud, Blaine, occasionally Vince . . . and Judith.

Damn, it was good to have her back.

Nymphs in sheer chitons framed the entrance to the casino proper, but he didn’t give them a second glance before stepping into the grand maze of the casino floor.

He let it wash over him for a moment—not just the bells and whistles, the pulsing music, the colors and lights, but the feel of hopes and dreams and despair all coming down to a roll of the dice, a spin of the wheel, a bluff, a final call.

Vince spoke in his ear, breaking the spell. “Boss?”

“Entering the casino now,” he said, bringing his focus back to the job at hand.

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41 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Pigeons (The Parnassus)

  1. Nice! I’ve never been to Vegas, but I think this sentence paints a fantastic picture: “…not just the bells and whistles, the pulsing music, the colors and lights, but the feel of hopes and dreams and despair all coming down to a roll of the dice, a spin of the wheel, a bluff, a final call.”

    Excellent story premise, too!

    Have fun at the conference! 🙂

    • Thanks, Teresa! I’m hoping that the workshop will help me figure out what to do with all this . . .

      But I’ll have fun, regardless, I’m sure. Writers are such cool people.

  2. Fantastic descriptions! I’ve been to Vegas and you captured the essence of the place perfectly.
    I’m intrigued why they are there for a bone marrow donor. Thieves? Do they plan on snatching someone? I’m intrigued.

    • Oh, good! The closest I’ve been to Nevada is driving through it on the way to Oregon when I was three . . . I don’t remember much. 😉

      They’re tracking down Blaine’s estranged family (see comment above).

    • That has to be one of the most interesting compliments these Sunday posts has received. 😀

      Thanks—and I hope your migraine is short and mild.

  3. Caper novel, heartwarming mystery — either way I want more! Great premise, amazing snippet, I was right there with him. This is always one of my favorite stops on Sunday mornings. 🙂

  4. Oh, and in case you didn’t’ get my reply on Ann’s Afterthoughts . . . yes, Stevie-girl and the Phantom stories should be okay for your ten year old. =)

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