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Starting a few paragraphs down from last week, Viv gets an unexpected phone call from her mother:
“Vivian Leigh Mitchell, you are on your way to The Elegant Crumb, right?”
Viv swallowed. “No, I’m in my kitchen having Honey Fros—having breakf—having an early lunch.”
“No, you’re meeting Kirsten and David for their wedding cake tasting.”
She set down her spoon. “The tasting is next week.”
“It’s today.”
“It can’t be today.“
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Poor Viv isn’t having the best morning . . .
It was difficult to choose eight sentences this week. I’d chose a snippet, decide to edit it a little and end up adding new stuff that improved it, but also made the potential passage just a little too long.
I know, I know—rough problem to have. But I really wanted to share the bit about Uncle Josh’s food allergies to see if it was funny, or just morbid. Then again, if I have to ask . . .
And no, I have no idea why most of my snippets have centered around food lately. Weird.
A nightmare come true.
Forget the tasting, just, “Get me to the church on time!”
Nice 8!
Thanks! Mothers always seems to have impeccable timing when it comes to phone calls like this—I hope to test that on my own kids someday. 🙂
Augh! I hate that feeling–supposed to be somewhere else, doing something else! lol Nice job of conveying that, Sarah!
Thanks, Teresa! Yeah, this story is getting far too autobiographical. 😉
Someone likes Gone With the Wind.
Someone needs help—and possibly an intervention—with naming characters, John, but I do the best I can. 😀
I love the dichotomy of the name The Elegant Crumb, and the character’s name.
But I’m terrible with dates, too, so I feel for her here.
Thank you, Misa!
This actually isn’t her fault, but that’s next week’s eight. 🙂
Very fun snippet. Had me smiling.
Good! Thanks, Millie. 🙂
I’d be bored at having to go to a wedding cake tasting too. I also noticed how Viv’s mother seems like a GWTW fan.
I don’t know, Carrie-Anne—free cake is free cake. 🙂
I’m not sure if Viv’s mother is a fan as much as I took an inside joke a little too far . . .
I enjoyed the excerpt, very true to life! and yes, it did make me hungry…great 8!
Thanks, Veronica!
I swear, you’d think I’d missed a meal or something. 😀
my stomach always hurt when someone reminds me I’m supposed to be somewhere. wonder how she’ll react or if she’ll finish her breakfast and duck the cake tasting
The way her day is going, she’ll probably have to make up breakfast by tasting a lot of cake, Michelle, but I still have some editing to do. 😉
No matter what age you are, it is never a good thing when your mother uses your full name…
No, ma’am, it is not. 😀
OOps, not a great way to start the morning. I’m also curious why it can’t be today in her mind, makes me wonder what else she had planned that day that is now all awry, great job!
I’m practicing torturing my characters on page and indulging my love of slapstick, Angela. 😀
Mostly, I think she was going to eat the whole box of cereal . . . 😉
Thank goodness for computer calendars and e-mail reminders!
True, Sue Ann! Viv’s best friend is her day planner—and she’s just about to check it. 🙂
Great use of the eights. I can relate to not wanting to confess what I’m eating as well as not always knowing ‘when’ I am with regard to days of the week. Very well done!
I have several guidelines for safe, peaceful living, and one of them is to never tell my mother I’m eating Honey Frosted Anything. 😉
Whenever I can’t remember the day, I always assume it’s Thursday . . . 🙂
Somebody forgot an important date? I wonder who’s right and who’s wrong? The pic made me hungry. Interesting snippet!
They’re both right, but one of them is more current! 😀
I love Cookie Crunch cereal . . . but it really, really hates me these days.
Uh oh. She’d better shake a leg!
I hate that moment when one week disappears from your life without you noticing.
And then reappears in the middle of the week you’re having, so it takes twice as long to get to the weekend, for no reason that makes sense? Yeah . . .
Ugh! That’s the worst. I hate not knowing I’m late. Very real dialogue. Well done.
Seriously! Especially when you know you’re not.
Thank you! 🙂
Centering your snippets around food isn’t a bad thing! Nice eight.
It seems to be a regular thing, anyway.
Thanks, Kate! 🙂
Oh no– This is not the way you want to start out the day. Enjoyed the snippet. 🙂
Thanks, Karen. And no. No, it’s not. 😀
Oh God, that is so me!!! I mess up my kids dentist all the time for some reason and it’s right on the calendar. Love the reality of this snippet and the whole mom using all three names thing. I purposely named my kids in a way it would rolled off the tongue well when I did it. 🙂 Great snippet!
Thanks, Cindy. 🙂
We practiced with our kids’ potential names, too. 😀
I hate that feeling – your readers will really relate to this bit!
This sounds like a conversation between me and my wife. (I’m the one with the accurate schedule.) 🙂
People who keep accurate schedules should clue in the less gifted early and often, with gentleness and no smug expressions.
Which I’m sure you do, Mike. 🙂
Ahem. Yes, yes, of course I do.