Weekend Writing Warriors: The Anti-Cupids (Icing on the Cake)

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And now, we meet Jack, our other reluctant main character:

Amazing wedding cake.

Jack had always assumed cake was just a conveyance for frosting, the more the better, but according to Bibi, the blonde-bouffanted, pink-smocked “design consultant” of The Elegant Crumb, a wedding cake was a symbol of a couple’s perfect, romantic, eternal love.

“Does that mean we can’t eat it?” he’d asked, hoping to lighten the mood.

But Kirsten had looked worried, David had looked worried at her worry, and Bibi had given Jack a flirtatiously stern look and launched into a thorough explanation of the spiritual meaning of “eternal” as experienced through the memory of scents and tastes and visual cues.

Which, apparently meant they would  be able to eat it, eventually, if Kirsten and David would hurry up and choose.

Someone suddenly moved past him, sweeping several pale pink napkins onto the floor and apologizing in a low female voice for tripping over his foot.

Kirsten looked up. “You’re late.”

“I’m not late for next Tuesday,” the woman said, stealing the sunglasses on top of Kirsten’s head and shoving them into her own nose.


Viv has arrived!  Let the cake tasting begin!

In case you’re wondering about logistics, Jack, Kirsten, and David are sitting on two pink-striped, adjacent  loveseats,  with a low table in front of them, holding the sample trays and those poor, pale pink napkins.  This was brilliantly described in the previous paragraph, of course, but oh, well.

I tried to find a non-cake photo, for once, but I couldn’t resist this one.  It’s gorgeous, but cutting into it might be dangerous . . . assuming there’s actual cake under there at all.

Thanks to everyone who helped me out last week on Viv’s technical writing project—I knew I could count on y’all!


41 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: The Anti-Cupids (Icing on the Cake)

    • Thanks, Veronica! I was watching one of those Wedding Cake Challenge shows a while ago and the bride said something similar about the cake being an “eternal reflection” of their love or something.

      The bakers kind of smiled and nodded, but then during their mini-interviews, one rolled her eyes and said, “Well, I hope not—it’s cake.”

  1. I like Jack! He’s great. 🙂 Beautiful cake – but – how do you eat it? Great snippet. The description is wonderful and Jack’s annoyance over the whole thing is well conveyed. And I can’t wait to meet the lovely woman who tripped over him. 🙂

    • I’m not sure you CAN eat it—maybe it’s a True Eternal Cake? 😉

      Thanks, Anne—Jack is a cynical dude, but he’s trying to be supportive of his brother . . .

  2. She really knows how to make an entrance! If I got married, to be different, I’d want a bunch of dairy-free cheesecakes instead of a wedding cake. A lot of wedding cakes don’t taste so good, particularly the last one I had the misfortune of tasting. The fondant was too rubbery, and they forgot to take the cardboard out of the layers.

    • My daughter is sold on the cheesecake idea, Carrie-Anne—though I hope we won’t have to worry about that for 18 years or so! 🙂

      I’m not a big fan of fondant. Or cardboard!

  3. Well done with the 8’s. You captured the sanctimonious crap that goes along with puffing up a price tag for some of the wedding crap…and played it against a breezy entrance. Well done, Sarah.

    • Thanks!

      I’m hoping my daughters opt out of the pearl-encrusted wedding circus when they get married . . . though I’m also hoping they’re old enough (and employed enough) to pay for it all themselves, anyway! 😀

  4. I’m with Jack — a cake is only as good as its frosting! I think I’d try that dangerous looking concoction in the photo; maybe all the foof is protecting an extra-delicious dessert.

    Nice snippet, too! 😉

    • I like the cake part, myself, but I don’t have Jack’s sweet tooth! 🙂

      And I hope you’re right—it would be depressing to think that there’s only Styrofoam under all those stars!

      Thanks, Charley!

  5. Very fun! I could see the whole thing, and I think I actually rolled my eyes and gagged a little at all the pinkiness : ) Nicely done.

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