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I’m not sure if the funny in this bit will work right, because I skipped over the won’t-squish-into-eight-sentences-part in the previous scene in which Viv tells Kirsten she’s going to go foraging for coffee before the gnomes fire up the bagpipes, thus puzzling Jack.
But I remembered I had this cool image in my media library—never mind why—and thought I’d give it a try anyway.
Viv is speaking first. This appears to be a habit of hers.
“I skipped my first hit of coffee this morning and at my level of addiction, the caffeine withdrawal gnomes start marching over the hill early.”
“Oh,” he said, as if something had just clicked. “With bagpipes?”
“And drums. I have to pay them tribute every morning or they get nasty.”
“I thought you might be hungover. No offense.”
“It feels about the same,” she said, “except without the fun the night before.”
I swear to you that there are many, many pages of this book that do not include the words coffee or caffeine.
Probably. Somewhere. Soon.
(a better explanation of the Caffeine Withdrawal Gnomes can be found here)
35 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Anti-Cupids (Bagpipes)”
Totally had me chuckling. I can so relate if I don’t have my caffeine fix. 🙂
It’s a vicious cycle, isn’t it, Karen? 🙂
Love the humour in this snippet. I drink tea like most folk drink coffee!
I’m a tea drinker, too—Irish Breakfast, Lady Gray, and the herbals—especially at night or when it’s as cold as it looks like this winter will be. 🙂
Haha! I think the humor worked quite well! Love the interaction between these two, Sarah. Nicely done!
Good! Thanks, Teresa! 😀
I really did LOL at this! It worked just fine for me. You’ve really got a handle on these characters’ personalities.
Thanks, Marcia! Jack is more difficult to figure out than Viv, but then again, he’s a guy . . .
Once again you elicit a smile and a chuckle (early Sunday a.m. with only half a cup of coffee in me yet : ). Nice job!
Laughs before coffee? That’s a terrific compliment, Millie! 🙂
Every time I think I can’t possibly like this story any more than I already do, you up the ante – gnomes and bagpipes and drums, I so want to be at the table WITH these people of yours! Terrific snippet.
Awww, thanks, Veronica. 🙂
Ha! Love it. I’ve got those gnomes on my back right now. (Evil little bastards.) Great dialogue between your characters, fun and “real”. 😀
It’s the gnomes with the ice picks that scare me, Monica. 🙂
LOL. My caffeine comes from Diet Pepsi and my gnomes bring a “will not go away no matter how much caffeine you pay tribute with” if I am late with my normal tribute. Come to think of it, my gnomes aren’t gnomes — they’re giants. Giants with really big drumsticks and bad eyesight — they think my head is the drum.
Every caffeine addict in the world will get this scene!
I’m a big believer in diet Pepsi, but the carbonation loves me not . . .
Glad my addiction can be handled with one diet Dr Pepper in the morning.
Lucky you, Sue Ann—though I’m aware than we caffeine addicts do it to ourselves! 🙂
LOL! I love the humor in this.
Too much. I so agree with her. If she’s going to feel like she’s hungover, she should at least have a good time the night before, lol. I really enjoyed the banter.
I know, right? 😀
Oh, no, not the bagpipes!
I’m a bit zombie-like in the morning, I can totally relate. 🙂
Yeah—there’s a reason armies brought those things to battle . . .
Viv’s co-dependent relationship with caffeine is definitely write what you know! 🙂
Ahahahahaha! Nice. Sometimes I feel the same way. Great snippet, Sarah. 🙂
Laughter is my favorite feedback—at least when I’m trying for humor. 😀
That last line cracked me up!
Good! Thanks, Elaine. 😀
Very cute dialogue!
Ha! I’m familiar with those gnomes myself. Great snippet!
They appear to be more universal than I thought . . .
You had me at bagpipes! Nice little exchange between the two. 🙂
Thank you! 😀
Funny snippet, I love the imagery.