Weekend Writing Warriors: The Anti-Cupids (Nosy)

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Happy Father’s Day to anyone who identifies as male and is owned by a child of any age or species.

Heart Fish

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 Here’s another bit of conversation between Jack and Viv, again from Jack’s POV.

This originally took place right after the final dress fitting,  which I’m reworking, but I’m thinking of moving it to the wedding reception, because it wouldn’t do for Jack to notice that he’s noticing Viv too soon.

So, depending on my final edit, Viv will take either a swallow of hazelnut mocha or a sip of Champagne, just as Jack comments that she doesn’t look much like her (conventionally gorgeous, waif-like) sister.

He means well . . .

Cyrano de Bergerac

 

 “Good eye,” she said, coughing a little.  “Questionable tact.”

“It wasn’t an insult, just an observation.”

She shrugged, as if it didn’t matter either way.  “Jen looks like Mom and I look like Dad, except for the hair and the nose; the hair is from Mom’s Grandma, or so she tells me. I have no idea who passed down the nose, but I’m grateful—the last thing this face needs is two pounds of Mitchell Schnozz stuck in the middle of it.”

“I like your face,” he said, but she’d turned away.

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Makes you wonder how he manages to snag all those marriage-minded women, doesn’t it?

Except maybe he’s comfortable enough with Viv to drop the smooth, practiced patter and be himself . . .  Yeah, that’s probably it.

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51 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: The Anti-Cupids (Nosy)

    • She’s as oblivious as he is, but from different angles.

      I missed the Boyer nose by thiiiiis much, The kicker? It was my grandmother’s. 🙂

  1. Definitely questionable tact! Sometimes family resemblance is a chancy thing.

    I love the idea of named family body parts–I know someone who called her rear an inheritance of the “Duckett Bucket,” which made me laugh. After all, misery loves company–and snappy names.

    • The Dread of Heredity, Caitlin! 🙂

      I LOVE the Duckett Bucket, and will be stealing it in the future! But the Wilkes Thighs are mentioned during the dress fitting. 😀

  2. I love her remark about the schnozz. Both my parents got the schnozz, but my brother and I lucked out in that department. Great snippet, Sarah. 🙂

  3. I love how she describes her features. At least in terms of facial features, I seem to take after the Wellek and Neiman branches of my family tree, but I’ve never thought to give those names to it.

  4. I love this story and I thought the snippet was quite realistic. Felt so sorry for your bumbling hero! I hope she gives him more chances (he’ll probably need more than one, based on his record to date LOL). Wonderful excerpt!

    • Thank you, Veronica!

      He’s not sure what to do with a woman who doesn’t value her looks—or think she has any to speak of. And it’ll take her a while to listen.

  5. “two pounds of Mitchell Schnozz stuck in the middle of it”–loved that bit!! I enjoyed this little glimpse at their exchange, I really want to read more about them.

  6. It sounds like Viv under-estimates her own qualities. And I think he doesn’t quite understand why he feels drawn to her. Good 8, very real.

  7. Sarah, you have fortunately avoided the Boyer snorkel which I have heard described as an upside down urinal. I unfortunately, did not. I think you have a much more attractive Brooksbank nose (via Harold). Congratulations to my grandchildren who didn’t inherit that singular feature from the Boyer side either. Think it is too late for me to get a nose job?

    • Yes, I think I chose the better option, though I think I actually have the Ray nose—it’s been edging into blobby potato territory as I age.

      The only woman I’ve ever seen pull off the Boyer nose with élan is your mother. ‘Course, she’s the only Boyer I remember, but still…

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