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Last week, a large man with notable physical characteristics walked into Tom Mahon’s detective agency, and asked if Bryan Mahon was his brother.
Tom cautiously admitted it, while sliding a hand into his open desk drawer.
Barring two sentences, here’s what happens next.
He frowned. “You’re two-natured.”
That was the west coast way of putting it; he was a long way from home. “Aren’t we all?”
“But you’re not pack.” He inhaled. “You’re prey.“
I had my Glock out and aimed before he could take a step.
I realized as I was choosing this week’s (brief) passage that I’m using a lot of short sentences in this story.
As many of you know, this isn’t my usual style (“Sarah, honey, is that a sentence or a paragraph? Melville went out of style for a reason, y’know.”), but Tom’s voice isn’t my usual, either.
I kind of like it.