Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Calling Fowl)

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Last week, Tom shot the werewolf who was leaping for him, teeth first.

The werewolf thinks this is totally unfair.

Victory

I slammed my knee down on his spine, wrenched his arm up and back, and pressed the barrel of the gun to the back of his head. “Who sent you?”

He coughed and spat blood on the wood floor. “You’re prey,” he said, like he was about to complain to the ref.

“I’m two-natured,” I said. “Who. Sent. You.”

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So, now I’m down to one-word sentences . . .Β  I thought of fiddling with the punctuation to fit in two more this week, but I like the way that last bit looks.

I just realized that the two-natured line isn’t funny if you didn’t read the post from two Sundays ago.Β  Oh, well.

Duck!2It also occurred to me that Tom’s other knee is on the floor, he probably have bloodstains on his pants, because gunshots bleed and Tom strikes me as the kind of guy who wouldn’t spare a thought about sparing his suits until the damage—from blood, spaghetti sauce, motor oil, whatever—has been done. So he’ll have to change at some point, but that’s good, since I need to get him to his apartment anyway.

And this, my friends, is part of why Weekend Warriors is so helpful to continuity and character development.Β  Darn it.

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46 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Calling Fowl)

  1. The werewolf thinks this is totally unfair. <- Lol. I missed last week's snippet while I was at a family reunion, but I read it today. Fabulous snippets! Love the dialogue. Compelling stuff.

  2. Dammit, prey’s not supposed to fight back! lol Great snippet, Sarah. I’m really enjoying the development of this tale.

  3. The werewolf better get over his insistence that your hero is prey because prey or not, he knows how to take care of himself! Really enjoying the story πŸ™‚ Great 8!

  4. The one word sentences work well here, and your two natured line is good too. I don’t feel a lot of pity for the werewolf, though, even if he doesn’t think what happened is fair.

  5. You always leave me looking forward to more. I don’t know for sure, but it feels like you’ve used the “You’re prey.” line a few times now. I could remember incorrectly;).

    • Thanks, Tina!

      This is the second time in the text that prey is used—I just checked—But I used it in the intros a few times. I know there’s a third one in this chapter (the werewolf has continuing trouble with the concept), so I’ll flag it for the next draft. πŸ™‚

  6. I get it, Sarah, about Weekend Writing Warriors being helpful “darn it.” lol It really makes me slow down and examine each word–and that writing behavior extends far beyond my weekly posts. πŸ™‚

    I read the snippet 2 weeks ago, so I caught the humor. πŸ™‚ And the one word sentences–kudos for not changing the punctuation to squeeze in more. They really work! Good 8!

  7. Even though I haven’t read your previous snippets, I find myself wanting more. I really like this little bit that you’ve given. The dialog is snappy and creates tension that has me on the edge of my seat. Great 8! πŸ™‚

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