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I’m skipping over a lot of stuff from last week, including a quick one-sided phone call to a certain police sergeant named Kyle, with whom our boy Tom and Turner have some history. She’ll be be arriving soon.
The silver-trussed werewolf who was dumb enough to attack our hero to send a message to Tom’s brother Bryan, has continued to put his foot in it—even with a couple of perforated kneecaps—by telling Tom that his boss considered him an easier target than his sister, Jackie.
Tom wouldn’t argue with that, unless Jackie was listening—but he has bigger worries than his pride.
Like what else this guy knows about Tom’s family . . .
“Just me?” I asked. If the person holding this guy’s leash knew about Jackie, they might know about our folks. Jackie and Dad could take care of themselves, and Mom, but no one would send a single wolf against either of them.
“I was told just you.” His expression said he’d be glad to throw in Turner for free.
“Was I supposed to live through it?” I asked, because I was always happy to add another nightmare to my repertoire, as long as it satisfied my curiosity.
He looked at me, then at the Glock.
“Right,” I muttered.
Still working out the kind of gun a former Army grunt with limited funds would carry—my gun guy sent me a list, but I don’t want to go back and edit right now—so the Glock is a placeholder. Plus, it’s fun to say.
The way I’m trying to work this world, the existence of Weres isn’t common knowledge, but some places are more Aware (see what I did there?) than others. Talbot City’s police department, for example, has a squad equipped to quell riots of all species, though the general public might not realize that those two, huge, bear-like drunks fighting outside the sports bar are more bear than drunk.
Hey, it worked for Sunnydale . . .
43 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Curiosity)”
Great dialogue and I “looked at the Glock” with him.
I wouldn’t want to admit that kind of thing to someone holding a gun on me, either . . . 🙂
Ugh oh! You added your trademark humor in a perfect place, Sarah–the repertoire of nightmares. Even so, this snippet is full of tension. I love his concern for his family. Good 8! I’ll be back for more 🙂 !
The longer this story gets, the more it becomes about family and what we’ll do to protect our own. Who knew? 🙂
Nice dialogue. I think the Glock would work; it’s small and affordable. My brother used to be a cop and told me Glocks weren’t overly expensive. Nice snippet!
I was hoping that was the case, Frank! Thanks! 🙂
” I was always happy to add another nightmare to my repertoire, as long as it satisfied my curiosity”
Great attitude. Great line!
Makes you think…
I figured a P.I. would be at least as nosy as a librarian, Chip—and probably more likely to choose truth over comfort. 🙂
You know, I always get excited when I click the link to your page. I know your snippet is going to delight me, and so far, you’ve never failed me…nope, not once 🙂
Awww, shucks Millie. 😀
Right back at you!
love the sarcasm there, well done! 🙂
Thanks, Elena! And congratulations on your book release!! 🙂
Guess not. Great snippet, Sarah. This is turning out to be a great suspense tale. 🙂
Nope. Not at all. 🙂
Thanks, Siobhan—I hope so!
Wise and sarcastic. What’s his phone number?
Sarcastic anyway. 😀
And oops, knew I’d forgotten something . . .
Fabulous dialogue and the tight snippets in-between too. I see the characters and I’m anxious for me. Well done! 🙂
Thank you, S. J.! 🙂
The were-predators don’t seem to have much respect for the were-prey. My curiosity is intrigued: how big is a were-duck in duck form? (i.e, is there conservation of mass?_
Traditionally, no, they don’t—and they tend to sell humans short, too. Not the best survival strategy in this day and age.
Conservation of mass has been a stone-cold pain, Sue Ann, I won’t lie. I’m toying with some kind of energy release or possibly ignoring the whole thing. Tom isn’t a scientist, so I could probably go the unreliable narrator route and fudge it. 🙂
Really enjoying this story, Sarah! This all flows really nicely and I want to keep reading.
Thanks, Eleri! 🙂 That’s great to hear!
I really liked this. Well worded, and enjoyed the humor. Looking forward to more.
Thank you! 🙂
It’s always great to hear a protagonist who is realistic as all hell (was I meant to survive), but doesn’t always have nerves of steel (always willing to add to nightmares). Nice.
Hi, Lisa! Thank you so much!
You realize that everything I know that’s worth knowing about werewolves, I learned from you, right? And that I’ll be throwing myself on your mercy in about three chapters? 🙂
Hey! You’re welcome. I love it already and cannot wait to see more! Yes, please! Also, you can’t see me, but I’m bowing. To be able to teach anything to an accomplished author like yourself is an honor. ❤
Accomplished what now? 🙂
I love the snark. And I love using Glocks. 🙂
Glocks are kind of instant brand recognition of danger, aren’t they? Like Kleenex, on a drier scale. Or something. Never mind. 🙂
I have to admit Glock does have the perfect ring to know you mean business. 🙂 Great snippet!
Yep—it’s a well-known brand all right. The go-to gun for American crime writers. 😀
Curiosity killed the… duck? Love how the wolf’s silence speaks volumes–though in his situation, I would have gone for a lie. “Of course you were going to live!”
Hope not, Caitlin, or this is going to be a novella. 🙂
I doubt Tom would have believed him if he’d tried.
Love it! So much fun and great dialogue. Well done.
Thanks, Tina. 🙂
That last line is kinda funny. Nice excerpt.
Thanks, Elaine. 🙂
Interesting twists and turns. I’m glad there’s more to the family because I Am Loving This and want more. Excellent excerpt!
Thank you, Veronica! 🙂
I’m having fun with Tom’s family—except for his mother, who is driving me nuts, because I know her personality and her voice but not her species. So annoying!
I love the line about adding another nightmare to the repertoire.
Thanks, Carrie-Anne. 🙂
He still doesn’t seem to want to say much.