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I made it!
And two days early, too!
It isn’t a novel, by strict definition,or finished by any definition, but it is a collection of 50,145 mostly-coherent words comprising a mostly cohesive narrative about a wereduck PI, written in 28 days.
I’ll take it. I won’t keep all of it, and heaven knows I’ll need to go back and fill in all the places I put “X” to represent all the things I couldn’t stop to research, and spackle the plot holes, and even write whole chapters I missed along the way . . . but for now, I think I’ll just sit back, appreciate the accomplishment, and note that I found the time to do this and my family is still speaking to me.
Here are eight sentences that were written during that final stretch. Tom, our POV hero, is facilitating a meeting between his brother Bryan, a werewolf, and the head of the Talbot City pack, Lowell Rhombeck.
“Hey, Bryan said, “long time no see.” He tilted his head a little—the respectful, if not entirely submissive, greeting of a loner to a packleader.
Rhombeck ignored it and held out his arm. “It’s good to see you,” he said.
Bryan reluctantly grasped the offered forearm and stepped close enough to allow Rhombeck’s nose to brush his left ear, as he returned the gesture.
They made an interesting contrast: Bryan was taller, with dark brown hair and glowing golden-hazel eyes, while Rhombeck was broad in the shoulders and all dark grey or silver.
Summer wolf, winter wolf.
But when they stood this close—closer than they’d been in years—they looked like the cousins they were.
Family issues can be so complicated . . .
Scenting and scent-marking feature in the behavior of weres in this story—or at least the canids and felines—possibly a little more than it would have, if I’d had the time to stop and think about what I was writing.
And if my cat had ever stopped trying to scratch himself with my pen while I was trying to use it.
Most of the time, both in the Real World™ and in the one I’m making up, neither scenting nor marking is an inherently sexual instinct/habit/tradition, any more than faire la bise (French cheek kissing) is,* though they certainly can be. Scent marking is primarily polite identification and/or a sign of reassurance, possession, or belonging between family members, friends, or lovers.
It should also be noted that among civilized werewolves, it mostly involves the more socially acceptable glands above the neck, at least in public, if you don’t mind.
Ducks and swans don’t feel the need to do this, but Tom will allow Bryan to mark him—unless his PTSD flares up at the thought of a wolf being that close to his jugular—because it’s important to his brother and a sign that he’s important to Bryan.
There’s only one scent-marking bathroom remark in this, so far, and Tom only says it to tick off the bad guy who clocked him over the head in last Sunday’s scene, so we’ll give him a pass. At least in this draft.
*Someone coined the term “Bro-bises”, which is cheek kissing between male friends, usually while they do the hug-pounding thing guys do. I love this.
40 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Nanowrimo Sunday #5”
Congrats on the win! (And I’m glad I’m not the only one posting a NaNo snippet.)
I love the interaction between the two of them. It seems… not quite friendly and not quite hostile. Frostile? (It’s 2:00 in the morning — I’m allowed to invent words.)
RIght back at you, Paula! And I didn’t have much else to post! 🙂
Are frenemies frostile? 😀
Congrats on finishing! This snippet is so visual. I like the greeting ritual you describe. A nice bit of world-building. Good 8, Sarah!
I have to pick and choose animal behaviors—or I might as well be re-writing Watership Down, and scenting is just too interesting to pass up. 🙂
Congrats on the win and an interesting snippet. Really original take on the concept. Great stuff.
Thanks, Catherine! 🙂
Woohoo … congratulations on finishing! And I reckon PTs new words says it all … Frostile 🙂
Thanks, Iris! 🙂
It is a good word, isn’t it?
I like the winter/summer of the weres. Your imagination is admirable.
Thank you, Charmaine!
I read somewhere that no one would ever take a photo of a wolf in its summer coat, because they’re so ungainly under the patchy fur. But I’m picturing Reed Diamond and Theo Theodoridis in June, and I don’t see the problem . . . 😉
Congrats on the win! Fantastic!! And I agree…family issues can be very complicated. 🙂 Enjoyed the snippet.
Thanks, Karen! Now all I have to do is piece it together . . .
And Thanksgiving is always a lovely reminder that family issues are universal! 😀
Congrats. This snippet is great.
Thanks, Cecilia! 🙂
woo-hoo, congratulations!! love the gesture of smelling one another, and winter wolf/summer wolf contrast, well done!
Thanks, Elena! 🙂
I hope I can make all this realistic enough. There’s a weird line between actual behaviors and overblown rituals . . .
Queen of Nano I coronate you! Congrats! I love the Summer wolf/ Winter Wolf description, and of course the whole story concept just tickles me : ) Clever girl!
A lot of Weekend Warriors and Sunday Snippeteers made it this year with far higher wordcounts—I’m just amazed I could find the time at all without burning all my vacation days—but thank you, Millie! 😀
This wereduck thing is such a strange concept, and I love it so much . . .
Congrats on your NaNo success! And the Summer Wolf/Winter Wolf snippet above has me hooked.
I waxed a bit poetic with that description, maybe, but no one seems to mind. 🙂
Congratulations on winning! It’s such an awesome feeling to have made that goal. I declared my win on Day 23 and am currently at almost 69,000 words.
I love the contrast between the wolves. They’re such beautiful animals.
Carrie-Anne is the Queen of Nano! 😀
Wolves are beautiful, except in the spring, when they blow their coats!:D
Congratulations on making it!
Intriguing snippet that leaves a lot of questions unanswered. Great 8.
I’m trying to not make their backstory so much of a mystery that the reveal is a disappointment. Mostly, I was just trying to figure it out myself. 😀
Thanks, Jennifer. 🙂
I loved the winter/summer analogy for the weres. And also the backstory you shared below the excerpt, about the scent marking…another terrific excerpt from this story that I love so far!
Thank you ,Veronica! 🙂
Not too much, then? I tend to babble at the best of times . . .
Congrats on your NANO success. I too like the idea of summer/winter wolf, and it draws the reader in.
Thanks, Elaine! 🙂
Congrats on winning!
Love the interaction. It’s a very manly kind of back and forth, isn’t it? A subtle jockeying for position in relation to each other, with neither wanting to make too big a deal about it.
Thanks, caitlin! And thanks for keeping the Thursdays going around here, too! 🙂
I was hoping for manly, and then they starting with the sniffing . . .
Congrats on winning NaNo! I didn’t partake this year, but remember the feeling well.
Love the contrast between the brown & silver wolves. I probably don’t have to say where my mind went while reading this snippet… 😉
Thanks! It’s like running a marathon on your hands, while holding your brain, isn’t it?
I know exactly where your mind went, Charley! 😀
“Summer wolf, winter wolf.” That’s a great bit. Sometimes it’s the simplest pieces that are the most powerful. Mazel tov on NaNo!
Thanks, Jeff! 🙂
I thought it might be crossing too far into fantasy but then again, werewolves, so . . .
Oh, how I love it when words are mostly coherent! Congrats, my friend!
I like your selection!
I can’t wait to read the whole story! I’ve been so entertained with the snippets. Congrats!
Thanks, Emmy! 🙂