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Last week, our hero Tom discovered that the wealthy client he thought he was going to meet had been switched with Leda Swanson, with whom he has a history.
I’ve taken out one sentence between that bit and this, because it’s only Tom agreeing with Leda that it is him.
It was either that or take out the maître d, and I kind of like what he does for the pacing.
“Have you replaced the previous Mrs. Featherton?” I asked. “Or is there some other reason you’re here and she isn’t?”
The maître d cleared his oiled throat and stalked discreetly away.
“Imogen is a friend,” Leda said, lowering her lashes. “I asked her to make the appointment for me; I didn’t think you would meet with me if I called.”
“Why wouldn’t I?” I asked, sliding into the seat opposite hers. “Your money is as good as anyone else’s.”
She blinked, as if indifference was a reaction that had never occurred to her.
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It’s possible that Leda thinks she’s the female lead in The Maltese Falcon. It’s also possible that she didn’t watch the whole movie . . .
Earful of Cider 
Seems she thinks she’s all that and a bag of fish but Tom thinks a bit differently — or is trying to convince her that he does. Either way, it’s a great snippet — I’m really enjoying these characters.
He knows better . . . but that doesn’t always stop anyone. 🙂
Thanks, Paula!
Oh snap! I almost feel sorry for her, but not too much. Fantastic snippet as always.
You and half the other characters, Christina! 😀
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Great scene. I’m glad you didn’t take out the maitre d.
Thanks, Cecilia! 🙂
I want to know more about how to “oil a throat!” LOL
Nice snippet!
No you don’t, Chip. 😉
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Seems like she’s being knocked down a peg or two!
I’m not sure it’ll register, but he’s trying, Carrie-Anne! 🙂
Love the maitre d. In show biz the motto is never turn down a small part. Good snippet.
And he’s clearly all about the show biz, Charmaine. 🙂
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I think that stung… Great snippet, can’t wait to see what she needs from him!
It may have Emmy . . . hard to tell. Not sure she knows what she needs from him at this point, either! 😀
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She sounds like the kind of person who wants to model their love life on Romeo and Juliet, because the story was *so* romantic, forgetting they were a bit stupid and ended badly. I can already tell he’s going to have his hands full dealing with her–he might need to add a ‘drama surcharge’ to her invoice.
That used to drive me crazy in high school and college: Romeo and Juliet isn’t a romance, it’s a tragedy of errors and a horrible warning against the stupidity of blood feuds and hormones.
And yeah, I’d charge her extra, too. 😀
hahahaha I like her reaction to his statement. You don’t have to like someone to do business with them. Great snippet, Sarah. 😀
Thanks, Siobhan! No, you don’t . . . and it doesn’t always help, either. 😀
Didn’t expect that, did she? That amused me.
No, she did not. Thanks, Elaine! 🙂
Most people don’t expect indifference–whether sincere or just for show.
Now i really want the scoop on Tom & Leda’s history–complete with feathers flying. 🙂
Really? I do, until shown otherwise, but Leda probably has a more robust ego than I! 😀
“Feathers flying.” Snerk! 😀
Nice bit of dialouge. The last line is especially strong.
Thanks, Jeff! I was hoping that line didn’t break character . . . 🙂
Business is business– You don’t have to like the person. Great snippet!!
And in this case, it probably wouldn’t help any, Karen! 🙂
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Great twist at the end!
Thanks, Patricia! 🙂
Very smooth in the way he handles her. Nice.
It gets bumpier later, Gem, but for now, he’s holding his own. 😀
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Ah, what’s a private eye without a well-placed zinger?
A fine eight sentences, as always.
Speechless? 😀
Thank you, Mike!
Always good when you can surprise someone with your reaction. (I’m a big fan of your hero.) This is such a wonderful story – another excellent excerpt!
Especially when they’re making ego-based assumptions! 😀
Thank you, Veronica!
Oh, great comeback! Seems she may need an expectation adjustment, and I have a feeling she’s going to get it, big time. 🙂
Possibly. Going to take a lot to get through her pretty skull, though. 😀
Lol, love the dialogue (and your comment about the Maltese Falcon;). Great 8!
Thanks, Tina! 🙂
Wonderful! I really loved that…I felt him take the wind out of her sails. Great snippet.
Thanks, Nicolette! 🙂