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Hey! It’s my 100th Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors! Woot!
To celebrate, I’m finally allowing our wereduck PI hero Tom and femme fatale-wannabe Leda Swanson to leave the Poisson d’Or, where they’ve been having cranky, stilted, multi-level conversation over pricey French cuisine for what seems like several months of Sundays.
Tom, however, has a soft spot when it comes to troubled women.
It’s probably in his brain.
“Thank you for not being angry with me.”
I held a two-second internal debate and took out one of my business cards. “Call me if I can help you with those problems you don’t have,” I said, handing it over.
She put it in her handbag and pulled out her valet ticket. “Thank you.”
“Sure,” I said, plucking the ticket out of her fingers. “Hey, Eddie,” I said, handing it over, “pick out a nice car for the lady.”
“Of course,” he said, jogging off.
Y’all remember Eddie, right? I still don’t know if he’s human or not . . .
I edited by candlelight for a while this week, because Winter. I managed to get a substantial amount done—let’s hear it for radio/Wifi silence—though when the power came on, I was surprised to see that all my notes were in purple ink.
It’s the little things . . .
Hey! It’s my 100th Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors! Woot!
42 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Keys)”
Fun snippet. I have to wonder what kind of car Eddie is going to bring back for her. LOL
I’m pretty sure Eddie could bring you any car you want, Paula, but since he’s there for reasons of his own, he probably won’t want to blow his cover so soon! 🙂
I quite enjoyed their interaction. Very well done!
Congrats on getting the power back on, and hope that the rest of the winter season goes smoothly for you. The weather everyone has been dealing with has been insane this year.
That’s an awesome WeWriWa milestone!
The scary part is that this isn’t even a record-breaking winter in terms of temperature and snow—in terms of depression and SAD, maybe . . .
I was shocked—that’s nearly two years! 🙂
What a wise-guy! “Call me if I can help you with those problems you don’t have,” I really like your character building, Sarah!
Purple ink? Crude but effective, lol.
Congrats on that milestone! We’re so glad you’re part of us! ❤
Tom sort of built himself, Teresa, but thanks!
Crude? I’ll have you know that it’s a purple fountain pen with a real nib, thank you. I have three and thought I’d picked up the blue one. 😀
Thank you! I’ve made so many awesome, supportive friends! 🙂
Haha. Very smooth! Wow, 100 Sundays- that’s quite an accomplishment!
He can be, Christina—it comes and goes. 😀
Eight hundred sentences . . . You know, that’s really only a couple of pages. Isn’t that weird?
I can see her only calling him when it gets worse that might not be the best idea ever.
You’re right, Linda. To Tom’s credit, though, I think he knows it. 🙂
Pick out a nice car for the lady … LOL …. fun snippet this week. loved it.
Thanks, Iris. 🙂
Tom is sooo smooth. I love him.
He has his moments . . . and he has his opposite moments, too. 🙂
I’m still laughing. Every line cracked me up. You’ve done a terrific job .
I never counted my eights on WEWRIWA but I bet they’re right up there with yours. So Woot for us!
I know a lot of people signed up around the time I did, so we’re all probably due a pat on the back and a box of truffles—only reason I noticed at all is that I number mine to keep track. 😀
I bet she’ll get a lemon of a car in exchange for that valet ticket!
She probably would, but Tom’s a friend of Eddie’s—and Eddie doesn’t want to blow his cover, yet (Eddie may only have three lines in this whole book, but he has a rich off-page life 😉 )!
Love the dialogue, especially “those problems you don’t have”. Fabulous 8!
Lol, keep the purple ink;). I hope Winter stops being a thing soon…
Congrats on your 100th post!
Thanks, Tina! 🙂
It’s a lovely royal purple—no sparkles! 😀
Winter can die. I know it’s an important part of nature’s cycle, blah, blah, blah, but seriously, death to it and all its wretched flaky minions!
Purple ink is a good thing! Love this story and Tom…liked how he just couldn’t help himself and offered to help her. Excellent excerpt!
Purple ink is awesome, though really, I just bought a pack of these pens and purple was the bonus color! 🙂
Tom is a sap, but at least he’s a self-aware sap.Thank you, Veronica! 😀
I’m curious to know what kind of car she’ll be getting. One thing struck me, though: “Sure,” I said, plucking the ticket out of her fingers. “Hey, Eddie,” I said, handing it over, “pick out a nice car for the lady.”
I don’t think you need “I said” after the Hey Eddie bit. It seems like repetition. Perhaps, writing “I handed it over to Eddie. “Hey pick out a nice car for the lady, will ya?”
Something like that, but that’s just me.
Congrats on the milestone. I need to find out how many Sundays I’ve been doing W.W.W.
Knowing Leda, something expensive. 😉
You’re right about the repetition—man, that’s a peeve of mine and I didn’t even see it!
It might be simpler to get rid of the first “I said”, but I’ll work it out. Thanks for the catch, Frank! 🙂
No problem. Repetition is a pet peeve of mine too.
I notice she didn’t agree to ask for his help… but maybe she will, when the time comes.
And purple ink is a nice choice. Nothing wrong with some color. 🙂
Nothing at all—sometimes, unusual colors help me keep the words moving. I used to write my college papers in green felt tip on yellow legal pads. 🙂
Like this line, “Call me if I can help you with those problems you don’t have,”
Reminds me of the country music lyric, “Since my phone still ain’t ringing I assume it still ain’t you.”
“And trying to explain while I’m insane is the hardest thing I’ve ever tried to do…”
I love it! Might even be my theme song. 😀
Can’t wait to see what he brings back.
I don’t know much about cars, so it’ll probably be something vague and expensive, Elaine. 😀
Congrats on the hundred Sundays! Lovely snippet
Thanks, Alice! 🙂
Happy 100th Sunday! Thanks for sharing Tom and all your other imaginary friends with us! 🙂
Thank YOU, Charley! 😀
I really like the light-heartedness of this snippet and Tom’s sense of humor. Lol, I also had to wonder what car she would be driving out of there
Kudos on the milestone! …and purple is my favorite color.
Thanks, Chelle. 🙂
It’ll be her car, but I’m not sure what it is, yet. Cars are one of those Second Draft Additions for me. 🙂
Oh, I can read an entire book full of such snappy banter (hint hint).
Right now, this thing looks like an advertisement for 3M’s Post-It division, and possibly the APA.
As soon as it’s readable, I’ll be begging you to give it a look-see, Mike. 🙂
Happy 100th post! Loved the snippet. Gotta know what car he’ll bring back. 🙂
Wow! 100 Sundays! Congrats! Interesting snippet and, like the others, I’m curious to see that car.