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Tom has arrived at the packleader’s house from last week,and meets someone new.
This person was supposed to be a housekeeping stock-character whose sole, original, three-line purpose was to guide Tom to and from the cells in the basement.
To my surprise, and possibly to Tom’s, she isn’t.
But she did let me put her in the same dress.
The female who opened the door was an inch or two taller than me, with thick dark hair held back in a clip that couldn’t be silver and a navy blue dress that was just shy of a uniform. Her eyes were long and slanted a little—a Hokkaidō in the wolfpile somewhere, maybe—and her nose was big enough to make her face interesting instead of delicate. Her mouth was wide and full and unsmiling.
From the way her gray eyes sharpened as they observed me observing her, I didn’t dare inventory anything lower.
“Thomas Mahon,” she said, as if checking me off a list. “I’m Merrok. This way, please.”
If Susan was Rhombeck’s work spouse, than Ms. Merrok was her counterpart in the pack.
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Hokkaidō wolves were known as Ezo wolves in Japan, before they became extinct in the late 1800s; they were descended from Siberian wolves, which I might use instead, for familiarity’s sake.
Naturally (pun intended), Merrok wouldn’t be descended from the wolves themselves, but the way I have Homo Mutabilis figured, the individuals resemble both the animal and the humans from the place their ancestors evolved. Don’t ask me why, but that’s the end product.
So both of Merrok’s forms will show her Asian ancestry the same way Jackie resembles both a Panthera tigris jacksoni and also a Malaysian woman (though not at the same time). Joly is a Transvaal werelion immigrant from Polokwane. And Hooper is a big white bruiser of European descent any way you look at him.
Tom, if you’re wondering, looks like a Muscovy drake and a bit like Joseph Gordon-Levitt, if Mr. Gordon-Levitt’s family had hailed from Central America.
I was expecting the dress to be gold and white (or is that blue and black?)
I especially love this line: “From the way her gray eyes sharpened as they observed me observing her, I didn’t dare inventory anything lower.”
I was surprised to learn she’s Asian — my impression was German. (For some reason she reminds me of Kraus from Benson.)
Wedgewood blue and rusty black. And no.
Interesting. I can see that—she believes in rules and regs—but she always had some Asian ancestry, though maybe not recent.
She seems so sharp, not really the kind to be toying with.
You’re right, Linda! 🙂
Excellent description, she sounds stern and resigned.
Thanks, Gemma! Resigned, she is. 🙂
I am totally loving your world and appreciate the background tutorial for the Homo Mutabilis. 😀
Thanks, Gem! I figure if you like it, I must be doing it right. 🙂
Haven’t been posting recently, too much else on my plate at the moment. But I moderate and am always so happy to see you on my section of the list : ). Love that her nose makes her face interesting as opposed to having a delicate face : ).
Wow, thanks, Millie! 😀
Not that delicate faces aren’t interesting, but Tom likes strong noses. Or something. It might be a duck thing. 🙂
Wow, what an intriguing character! I love the thought you’ve put into the background of this.I also love the idea of a wereduck Joseph Gordon-Levitt. 🙂
Thanks, Christina!
The background kind of evolved with the characters—I’m not clever enough to pre-plan. 🙂
I love the idea of a Joseph Gordon-Levitt anything . . . 😉
“nose was big enough to make her face interesting instead of delicate” good line!
Nice 8!
Thanks, Chip!
At this point in his life, Tom prefers strong over delicate. 🙂
Love the descriptions in this snippet. Wow. Great job on the snippet this week.
Thanks, Cecilia! 🙂
Love the imagery! I could see what she looked like perfectly. 🙂
Thanks, Karen!
I’ve been working on my descriptions–I’m better at dialogue. 🙂
ROFL. Characters can be so difficult sometimes, but I’m glad she let you use the same dress.
She seems like a no-nonsense sort. This is going to be fun!
The worst thing is, our brains are doing it to ourselves . . . 😀
She’s extremely no nonsense. Tom may change that a little. 🙂
Thanks, Kate!
Ha! “…From the way her gray eyes sharpened as they observed me observing her, I didn’t dare inventory anything lower…” Nice! Your descriptions are outstanding, Sarah!
Isn’t it crazy how sometimes characters refuse to be just walk-ons??
Thanks, Teresa! I’ve been working on them. 🙂
Sometimes?! 😀
I love your description of her! She sounds like someone not to be messed about with.
She is not, Carrie-Anne. Tom is about to be a source of confusion for her! 😀
She opens the door and suddenly another fascinating character is in your story. What a wonderful world is fiction. Thank you for this terrific snippet.
Thanks, Charmaine! 🙂
Though if those door keep opening, I’ll have more characters than Gone with the Wind . . .
You’ve described her so well! No wonder she has a bigger role than you planned.
Thank you, Patricia!
I was doing well until she started interrogating Tom about his role in all this. 😀
Oh my, the queen bitch herself. Nicely done, Sarah. 😀
More like a First Knight Bitch, but yep! Thanks, Siobhan. 🙂
Yes, she doesn’t seem like the kind of lady you want to catch you checking her out. And I’m not surprised she wasn’t willing to stay an “extra,” you can sense her personality from just a few lines, and she’s no delicate flower.
She has no patience for that–and she’s well aware that Tom isn’t a wolf, either, so her hackles are at the ready.
Thanks, Caitlin! 🙂
Great description. I have a perfect mental image of her personality and what she looks like. 🙂
Thanks, Jennifer! 🙂
Neat way to work in the Japanese angle. I love how you captured them taking each other’s measure.
Thanks, Jeff! I wasn’t sure how to work it in without being clichéd . . .
And that’s exactly what I wanted to express—good! 🙂
Fabulous description. I love how you wove the ancestry in there and am intrigued to find out more about Merrok. Great 8.
Thanks, Tina! She’s a big part of the second half of the story–or will be once I weave her in a little better. 😀
Some great descriptions here! I’m curious about this world.
Thanks, Dianne! 🙂
It’s a little surreal, but I’m hammering out the logic . . .
The story just keeps getting impossibly better and better. I’m glad Thomas exercised his discretion when it came to “inventorying” LOL. Great snippet!
Tom is no fool. Mostly. 😀
Thank you, Veronica!
Poor Tom, one more wrinkle in his day. Maybe she’ll focus elsewhere just long enough so he can sneak a peek? 😉
Great snippet!
Tom has more self-preservation than that, Charley. Probably. 🙂
Thanks!
I don’t expect Tom dared to check her out any more. I think I like this woman.
He does not, Elaine. His mother and sister raised him right. 😀
I like her, too.
Terrific use of visual description, helps the reader be “right there”
Thanks, Chelle. 🙂
Ooh. He didn’t get a chance to give her the ol’ elevator eyes!
I worry about you sometimes, Mike. Not often, but sometimes. 🙂
Interesting snippet–I like her, too.
Thanks, Nancy! 🙂
OMG – I loved today’s snippet … you did so well with the description, especially the nose. Big kudos!
Thanks, Iris! 🙂
Ooh I just love everything about this…the premise, the snippet. So intriguing Sarah 🙂
Thanks, Nicolette! 🙂