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When last we left him, our hero Tom—former army sniper, current PI, and born wereduck—was visiting stately Rhombeck manor, home of the leader of the Talbot City werewolf pack, in order to interrogate Travis Rendall, the west coast werewolf who attacked him in the first chapter.
Tom was led to the lower level “retaining rooms” by Merrok, the pack’s Seneschal and one lady who does not suffer fools. At all.
She’s speaking first:
“I’ll wait in the rotunda; Press the red button if you need anything.”
“Thanks,” I said, carefully not watching her walk away.
Travis Rendall smirked. “That’s a fine piece of tail,” he said.
I raised an eyebrow. “I double dog dare you to say that without these bars in the way.”
He huffed in contempt.
“I smell you haven’t taken advantage of the showers, yet,” I said.
Tom has to suffer fools all the time, but that doesn’t mean he likes it.
I have no idea why I bothered to write “Travis Rendall” every single time his name comes up. I’d like to say that I wasn’t sure whether Tom was going to call him Travis or Rendall, so I wrote it all out to make it easier to do a universal change later . . . but that’s giving me far too much credit.
I think there are four or five spot still open in the cabin Christina Ochs and I started over at Camp Nanowrimo. Most of us are going to easy route with a monthly goal of 30,000 words (or in my case, 30 hours of editing), but you can set it as low as 10,000 words, which is only around 334 words a day.
42 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Double Dog Dare)”
Shouldn’t that be “double wolf dare you”? I love the humor in this and can’t wait to read the whole book. Need a beta?
And I just took total leave of my senses re: Camp NaNoWriMo — in addition to doing NaPoWriMo (30 poems in 30 days) I set my word count goal to 60k.
I haven’t lost my mind — it ran away in self defense.
Probably, Paula, but it was my try at being subtle. 😀
I don’t need one, yet, but when I do, I’ll ask. Thank you!
And good mercy, that’s ambitious–I’m just hoping for an hour a day editing, on top of my usual stuff!
haha! I like the “double dog dare”, Sarah. Nice! 🙂
Thanks, Teresa! 🙂
I’m not sure how smooth the rest of the conversation will go with such a start. Always so funny though.
Not very, Linda. 🙂
Great last line! Enjoyable snippet.
Thanks, Gemma. 🙂
Oooh, sounds like Tom is having a bit of fun taking advantage of the situation.
I hear ya on the first and last name issue. I have a few characters where I can’t decide, or alternate, or forget . . .
Could be, Chrstina! 🙂
I have a name chart–but I have to remember to use it . . .
always a wise duck, always looking for trouble and most important, always funny.
Thanks, Charmaine! 🙂
Fabulous snippet. Love the exchange between Tom and Travis and the way Tom deals with him. Great 8.
Thanks, Christina! There’s no love lost between them, that’s for sure. 🙂
I love the line “I double dog dare you”. Bahahaha. Maybe he should shower before saying it too.
Thanks, Cecilia! 😀
Haha! I love this scene already. Those bars certainly give Tom some freedom to have a little fun with Travis Rendall.
As to the full name, some people are always referred to by their first and last together. It happens. You could make that part of the story. He’s not just Travis, or Rendall, he’s Travis Rendall. Not to be confused with his cousin Travis Johnson, who is also a werewolf but a fairly hapless and hilariously ineffectual one.
Thanks, Kate! 🙂
That’s an interesting suggestion–Tom probably wouldn’t know that, but Travis’s friends would . . .
I like his sense of humor.
Thank you! 🙂
I really like Tom:)
I do, too. 🙂
I notice Travis Rendall also waited until she’d walked away before making his comment… which proves he might not be too stupid to live, after all.
He did, though werewolf hearing is pretty sharp, so really, he’s too stupid to shut up. 🙂
Great scene. 🙂 🙂
Thanks, Jennifer! 🙂
Tom is wonderful. Sometimes there are people that you just automatically call by both of their names. I’ve done it before too.
There are, that’s true, Elaine. And if I call Travis by both names, I can avoid my usual problem with choosing how to put a possessive on a name that ends in ‘s’! 😀
I do so love the snarky banter. 🙂 Loved the scene.
Thanks, Karen! Considering your talent for banter, I really appreciate that! 🙂
“I double dog dare you” – great line !
Thanks, Iris! 🙂
I love your characters’ dialogue and back-and-forth. It always flows so well.
If I could belong to two cabins at once, I’d join yours. My goal is to complete my final edits and revisions of a manuscript that’s been around for a long time, thankfully under 58,000 words at this point. It’s such a relief to have shorter books to work on in between doorstoppers.
Maybe next year, then! Good luck with your edits! 🙂
Another fine scene! *cough* beta reader *cough cough*
As soon as Camp Nano is over, I should have a shareable MS, Mike! When I do, I’ll ask! 🙂
I LOVE Tom. And this story. And every detail. And…when can we read ALL of it?! Great excerpt…
Thank you, Veronica!
I’m going to edit hard this month–I’ve cleared most of my other projects, so this is it! 🙂
Double dog dare… such a great phrase for this scene. This is nice & crisp. Well done.
Thanks, Jeff! I’m trying to keep the canine puns to a minimum but . . . no, I’m lying. 🙂
It’s fun to read them take a stab at each other. I’m quite curious to see how it unfolds throughout the discussion.