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In last week’s bit, Bryan (our wereduck hero Tom’s werewolf brother who recently escaped from the Big Bad) told Tala (the half-feral werewolf he brought with him) that he expected her to be polite to his family, who were offering them a safe haven.
Tala questioned the concept of “safety” and, after I ran out of sentences, stomped back into the house, followed by Mrs. Mahon (Tom and Bryan’s mother) and Jackie (their weretiger sister, who is Not Impressed by Tala).
Tom and Bryan take a breather before they launch into a plotful (hush, it’s a word) discussion:
“Lotta bossy females around,” Bryan murmured. He didn’t sound like he minded.
“And you brought another one,” I said.
He sighed. “Take it easy on her, Tom, could you?”
“Depends on what you have to say.”
“Fair enough,” he said. “Any chance of a beer?”
“Is Dad grilling?”
“God, it’s good to be home,” he said.
Not the most exciting bit, maybe, but I like how Tom and Bryan interact in it. I think it defines their relationship better than the “scar explanation” from a few weeks ago.
The mouthwatering image of grilled salmon was taken by Jon Sullivan and placed in the public domain, according to Wikimedia Commons.
44 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Home)”
I LOVE this snippet, Sarah! Your wonderful humor comes through. lol. The dialog is very natural, and the gender pigeon-holing coupled with that subtle humor really works. Good 8. 🙂
Thanks, Teresa! 🙂
Tom doesn’t exactly seem to be Tala’s biggest fan…
Tom is intolerant of intolerance. This isn’t always a virtue . . . 🙂
Nice family dialogue! I wonder if Tom is not a bit afraid of all those girls, lol.
He’d be the first to admit it, Linda! Thanks. 🙂
I love the witty dialogue exchange. The grilling makes this a perfect snippet for Sunday.
Thanks, Frank! Happy Birthday! 🙂
Love the interplay between these two, and you’re right- it does show the dynamic between them really well.
Thanks, Christina! I was hoping . . . 🙂
I ‘m in love with this wacky family, your sense of humor and the whole ‘were’ bit.
Thanks, Charmaine! So am I. 😀
This snippet is fantastic! The dialogue flowed easily and made the characters seem like real people. Great work! 🙂
Hey, all my imaginary friends are real people! 😉
Seriously, though, thanks, Amy. 🙂
Sara, you aced it. Watching them be brothers is splendid. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks, Kim! 🙂
I do love their easy banter. Grilled or smoke salmon on the barbecue–Yep, that’s the only way to have it. 🙂
Thanks, Karen! 🙂
I’ve been craving salmon since I found that photo . . .
Grilling and alcohol, they go together like flames and slowed reflexes! 🙂
At least I’m not on fire. 😛
Don’t sell yourself short, caitlin. 😀
I like their interaction too, very realistic. I know that feeling of being home and you sure convey it here. This story has me SO involved. Can’t wait to read it all…
Thank you, Veronica! 🙂
Editing has been slower going than I ‘d hoped, but I’m still plugging away.
Super interaction between them. I nailed the feeling of ‘home.’
Er, you nailed it, I mean.
Thanks, Elaine. 😀
Typical male, complaining about bossy women and really not minding at all. Great easy dialogue between the two. … wonder if I have any salmon in the freezer?
Too true, Chelle! 🙂
I bought some salmon burgers this morning. 😀
Okay, computer is being a pain (of course!). No doubt that brothers like to tease their sisters. Just ask any of my fake brothers–LOL. Salmon sounds good for dinner but I have to go to the grocery tomorrow so it looks like I’ll be ordering pizza.
Hope you enjoyed, Nancy! 🙂
A wereduck? You didn’t have to go any further than that to hook me.
Awesome! Thanks, Ed. 🙂
Love the banter …. and love the word “plotful” … LOL
Thanks, Iris! 😀
I like this, especially the line about “bossy females.” It reminds me of my friend who tried to help me write a blurb for my first book and referred to my heroine as a “stubborn thankless female.”–LOL–glad he stuck to painting the cover instead. Boy, I miss him–he passed away in 2014.
Bossy isn’t necessarily a compliment, but Bryan is referring to their sister, and all brothers reserve the right to insult their sisters. Right? 😀
Tom sounds a bit cranky, but… at least he’s willing to listen. And that seems better than what Tala is willing to do most of the time I’ve seen her.
You make a good point, Eden. 🙂
I like the interaction. It’s a little slice of the everyday amid all of the weirdness going on.
Thanks, Jeff! 🙂
Your characters always have such fun, natural dialogue. It reveals so much about them.
Thanks, Carrie-Anne! 🙂
I decided to save my money and had breakfast for dinner instead. But I got salmon today at the grocery.