Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Home)

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In last week’s bit, Bryan (our wereduck hero Tom’s werewolf brother who recently escaped from the Big Bad) told Tala (the half-feral werewolf he brought with him) that he expected her to be polite to his family, who were offering them a safe haven.

Tala questioned the concept of “safety” and, after I ran out of sentences, stomped back into the house, followed by Mrs. Mahon (Tom and Bryan’s mother) and Jackie (their weretiger sister, who is Not Impressed by Tala).

Tom and Bryan take a breather before they launch into a plotful (hush, it’s a word) discussion:

Salmon

“Lotta bossy females around,” Bryan murmured. He didn’t sound like he minded.

“And you brought another one,” I said.

He sighed. “Take it easy on her, Tom, could you?”

“Depends on what you have to say.”

“Fair enough,” he said.  “Any chance of a beer?”

“Is Dad grilling?”

“God, it’s good to be home,” he said.

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Not the most exciting bit, maybe, but I like how Tom and Bryan interact in it.  I think it defines their relationship better than the “scar explanation” from a few weeks ago.

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The mouthwatering image of grilled salmon was taken by Jon Sullivan and placed in the public domain, according to Wikimedia Commons.

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44 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Odd Duck (Home)

  1. I LOVE this snippet, Sarah! Your wonderful humor comes through. lol. The dialog is very natural, and the gender pigeon-holing coupled with that subtle humor really works. Good 8. 🙂

  2. I do love their easy banter. Grilled or smoke salmon on the barbecue–Yep, that’s the only way to have it. 🙂

  3. I like their interaction too, very realistic. I know that feeling of being home and you sure convey it here. This story has me SO involved. Can’t wait to read it all…

  4. Typical male, complaining about bossy women and really not minding at all. Great easy dialogue between the two. … wonder if I have any salmon in the freezer?

  5. I like this, especially the line about “bossy females.” It reminds me of my friend who tried to help me write a blurb for my first book and referred to my heroine as a “stubborn thankless female.”–LOL–glad he stuck to painting the cover instead. Boy, I miss him–he passed away in 2014.

    • Bossy isn’t necessarily a compliment, but Bryan is referring to their sister, and all brothers reserve the right to insult their sisters. Right? 😀

  6. Tom sounds a bit cranky, but… at least he’s willing to listen. And that seems better than what Tala is willing to do most of the time I’ve seen her.

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