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“I won’t have our child superseded by a brother or sister simply because he or she can’t shift. And my bloodline,” he said, with razor-sharp scorn, “never brought me anything but trouble. If I didn’t love you so much, I never would have wanted children at all. But if I don’t have an acceptable replacement, there will be a Challenge Moon.”
“What’s a Challenge Moon?” I asked.
“Just what it sounds like,” he said. “If enough of the pack supports a different packleader, a challenge is held on the full moon. The . . . candidates try to maim their opponents beyond the ability to fight—and the winner decides whether the loser is worthy to remain in the pack. These days, they’re usually given letters of introduction to other leaders and their portion of the pack’s assets. But sometimes they’re considered too dangerous to the pack—or the packleader.”
His reasoning is certainly becoming clearer. It would seem that their child could be put at risk if he remains in his position.
Wow. Really powerful speech, and it’s great that we can see more of his struggle. Great idea with the Challenge Moon! Awesome writing!
Hmmm… the Challenge Moon doesn’t sound like good news for Bryan. In fact, it rather sounds like a set up. (Or maybe I’m just paranoid.)
Tsk, tsk. Really now–these folks need the services of a good family councilor or maybe a labor arbitrator.
Wow–excellent snippet. The pack has rules, and dang! They’re kind of dangerous ones.
I do like him. You write great characters, Sarah. 🙂
Serious stuff…we’ve come a long way since the earliest days of wereduckery. I’m enjoying all the twists and turns…
I can guess what happens if the loser is considered too dangerous. Nicely done.
I love the concept of a Challenge Moon. He brings up a lot of valid concerns.
Another night another Moon Challenge. What will he think of next? Ho Hum. Way too funny. Sarah.
He has some good arguments. A Challenge sounds like it has a high body count.
There’s something hinky with this sentence: “I won’t have our child superseded by a brother or sister simply because he or she can’t shift.” You can read it as the brother or sister being the s/he that can’t shift, instead of what you mean–their nonshifter child.