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When last we left him, Tom described one of the “retaining rooms” in the basement of Lowell Rhombeck, the leader of the Talbot City werewolf pack.
This week, we take a look at the room’s occupant.
Travis Rendall was lounging on the bed, watching the TV embedded in the wall behind a clear pane of something that appeared to be reasonably werewolf-proof, despite the four diagonal furrows scratched across its surface.
I suspected Travis; he was wearing a thick, padlocked collar with silver studs around it and a red rash underneath.
“He’s been a bad boy,” Merrok said, tapping a series of numbers on the pad by the door. The TV shut off.
Travis turned his head to look at us. “Is it snack time already?” he asked, eying me.
His smile showed a mouthful of bad teeth but no fangs. The silver was doing its job.
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Don’t worry: no wereducks were harmed in the writing of this scene. Travis is just being his obnoxious self.
Hey, is anyone planning to go to Camp Nanowrimo next month? Could I persuade you? It’s a lot less intense than the National Novel Writing Month and an excellent excuse to eat S’mores at your desk.
Christina Ochs and I have set up a private cabin, which holds twelve and has its own on-call barista. If you want to join us, drop me a Camp Message once you’ve signed up (I’m Sarah W over there, too) and I’ll send you an invitation (Christina, did you get yours?).
Cabin assignments will be given by the hosts in three days and Camp starts April first!
Travis doesn’t seem to be too repentant…
I’m doing Camp NaNoWriMo — haven’t missed one yet. Standard 50k goal for camp, personal goal of 60k. Oh, and I’m doing NaPoWriMo too.
Want to join our cabin? It would be nice to have an old hand on hand! 🙂
I knew it was a bad idea for a bird to get in the wolf nest… but at least he can fly, right?
Flying in a locked down basement wouldn’t be an advantage, Linda–but never fear, Tom is not there as lunch. 🙂
Okay, that would be unnerving! Being eyed while he asked about snack time! lol Great characterization, Sarah!
Tom has great faith in silver-infused iron bars and sarcasm, Teresa. 😀
Thanks!
Can you say unnerving! lol Great seen. I also love your disclaimer at the end. “Don’t worry: no wereducks were harmed in the writing of this scene. Travis is just being his obnoxious self.”– now I don’t have to worry. lol
It’s only the first third of the book–I’d hate to lose my MC that early! 😀
Thanks, Karen.
YIKES! I don’t want to enter the room. Humor saves the day.
Don’t worry, Charmaine–Tom won’t be opening that door! 🙂
I like the use of “reasonably” to describe “werewolf-proof.” I suspect being werewolf-proof is like being toddler-proof. Give them long enough unattended, and they’ll break it somehow.
True enough, Caitlin, though werewolves know full well what will happen. 🙂
I’m reminded of a joke: “We tried to baby proof the house, but darned if one didn’t get in anyway.” 😀
Ouch. Great snippet, Sarah. I had no idea silver was so corrosive. Nicely done. 🙂
Thanks, Siobhan!
Silver isn’t particular corrosive, though it tarnishes a treat. Weres can be highly allergic, though, traditionally. 🙂
I like the reference to a rash under his collar. It’s little details like that which can make a scene really sing for the reader. Nicely done.
Thanks, Patricia. 🙂
Nicely detailed. Everything works together well to give me a good picture of the scene. The silver on the teeth thing really stood out to me.
Thanks, Elaine!
I love your opening description of the TV!
I’m doing Camp NaNo for the first time, though I’m already in a cabin with my local writing group. After finishing an 891K first draft, it’s such a relief to edit and revise something that’s under 58K!
Thanks, Carrie-Anne. 🙂
Oh, well–drop me a note sometime!
Fabulous description and I love Travis’ comment on snack time;).
I’ve just signed up for CampNaNo and am no somewhat terrified;). I’d love to join you and Christina, and will reach out once I’m registered. I’ll keep my fingers crossed that you still have room and the barista works 24/7.
Gah, spelling mistake! I am now somewhat terrified (and obviously unable to spell;).
Thanks, Tina!
Don’t worry, we have plenty of room. And Nanowrimo is nothing to be scared of–it’s fun! 🙂
Snack time? What (or who) is on the menu? This sounds ominous. Great snippet.
Hmmm. Good questions, Chelle. 🙂
Thanks!
Great visuals. I like “the four diagonal furrows scratched across its surface” and “mouthful of bad teeth”. They put me in the scene and made me cringe. 🙂
Thanks, Jennifer! 🙂
Anything they do to Travis is too good for him. I love this scene.
Awww, he’s really just a disenfranchised, misunderstood killer puppy who needs a flea bath and a couple of sessions with a rolled up newspaper (wrapped around a lead pipe, for preference).
Thanks, Mike! 😀
So curious to see what happens next! Really enjoying this story.
Thanks, Dianne!
They’re actually going to have a talk about pizza. No, really. 🙂
“Reasonably werewolf-proof”… that’s just brilliant. I have to find a way to work that into a conversation. Great first look at Travis…
It’s a more useful descriptor than you’d think, Jeff. 😀
This s really a second look, but Tom was too busy the first time to notice his teeth, except as plentiful and pointy.
Ok, Travis sounds bad-tempered and hungry! Hope he’s not in the mood for duck. 😜
I got the cabin invite and accepted. I’m excited- especially if the barista is cute.
He’s just trying to spook Tom, promise! 🙂
You get to describe the barista, Christina–in detail, please! 😀
Such a fun story and I love each new element you introduce us to. Excellent excerpt!
Thanks, Veronica! 🙂
“Is it snack time already?” he asked, eying me – love it. Great post!
Thanks, Iris! 🙂